Sunday, December 25, 2005

1st T's Corr.of Article 1: The Number of the Beast by M.Milicevic

Milos, here are some hints for you to try and improve your article. I have highlighted the sections to be corrected in bold (these are mostly spelling, vocabulary or grammar errors). The italicised red sections need improvement in style or organisation. You could also make some kind of a reference to your title - some people have no idea what it refers to.

Do you know the famus opera Tommy by the famus Rock band Who? Or the names like Bruce Dickinson and Ozzy Ozbourne? If you aren’t go on virtual site Rock and Roll hall of fame and museum. It is interesting that this museum has every document about every Rock selebraty and his achivments during their life.

Expetialy I liked timeline in which you can see the historical developing of Rock and Roll. You can learn about famos heavy metal bands which i like /repetition/ vary much and I can recomend you to read about Metallica, Iron Maden, Van Halen, Kiss Black Sabath and many other bands.

If you want to see what guitars have the great players played on or to see /repetition/ historical developing of Rock and Roll go on www.rockhall.com.

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