Final T's Correction of I Love This Game by A.Petrovic

Have you ever thought that museums don’t have to be dusty and boring? One such example is the world’s most popular basketball museum - The Naismith Memorial Basketball Hall Of Fame in Springfield. This museum exists to acknowledge and honor people who have risen to the top of their profession. It was born on February 17, 1968, on the campus of Springfield College, owing to the efforts of enthusiasts headed by the famous Lee Williams.

In this museum you can see the whole history of the basketball. In my opinion, the most interesting story here is about one of the best NBA season ever, in 1983/84. In that article you can find out things about true legends of NBA. There is a comparison between Larry Bird and Magic Johnson who played big NBA finals in that year. There is also a story about our famous people in basketball.

When there is no basketball game you can watch, you should visit Naismith’s Hall Of Fame Museum and find out about things and people who have changed basketball history and made basketball one of the most popular sports.-by Aleksandar Petrovic

ASSSIGNMENT 3/2: REVIEW OF PEOPLE I LIKE

Dear Lingva Achievers,


Read the (VIRTUAL) MUSEUM articles and do the following tasks:

1. Write what you liked about each museum article.
2. Ask each writer one or two questions about the museums they have described.
3. Suggest how the article could be improved.
4. RATING: Mark each composition on a scale from 1 to 5 asterisks (***** is the highest marks)

All of the above should be written in the Comments section.

Mira

Stundents self-correction of article 1:I love this game by A.Petrovic

You already know about Jordan and other famous basketball players but do you know who was Dr. James Naismith and what did he do? He left many things behind himself but the most popular is basketball museum called The Naismith Memorial Basketball Hall Of Fame museum in Springfield. This museum exict to acknowledge and honor people who have risen to the top of their profession. It was born on February 17, 1968, on the campus of Springfield College, when a group of people headed by famous Lee Williams managed to open museum to the public.
In this museum you can see whole history of the basketball. In my opinion, the most interesting story here is about one of the best NBA season ever 1983-84. In that text you can find out things about true legends of NBA. There is a comparation between Larry Bird and Magic Johnson who played big NBA finals in that year. There is also a story about our famous people in basketball.
When there is no basketball game you can watch, you should visit Naismith’s Hall Of Fame Museum and find out about things and people who changed basketball history and made basketball for one of the most popular sports.

Final T's Corr. of Article 1: Gateway to Ancient Egypt by N.Maksimovic

If you like stories, ancient myths and films like Indiana Jones, this site is the right place for you. On the other hand, if you want to impress some hot history teacher by telling him or her an interesting story from Egypt mythology I would again give you the same advice: Stop looking through old dusty books and get on the http://www.gatewaytoancientegypt.co.uk/!

In my opinion the best fact is that this way you can both learn and find some interesting stuff in your spare time. Take religion, for example. It has always played an important role in the lives of Egyptians. During "Pharaonic" times a large number of Gods and Goddesses were worshipped. These took many different forms. Although their structure might look a little bit complicated, you can choose just a few and remember an ocean of miraculous details.

This and much more can be seen on the site, including exceptional illustrations, masterly designed wep pages and a wide choice of links, if you want to get deeper into this stuff. So don’t get bored, get on the net!

Final T's Corr. of Article 1: The Name of the Beast by M.Milicevic

Do you know the famous opera Tommy by the legendary rock band The Who? Or the names like Bruce Dickinson and Ozzy Ozbourne? If you don’t, go to the site Rock and Roll Hall of Fame and Museum. It is interesting that this virtual museum has every document about each and every one of rock celebrities and their lives and achievements.

I especially liked the timeline in which you can see the historical development of rock and roll. You can learn about famous heavy metal bands which I am especially fond of, and I can recommend you to read about Metallica, Iron Maiden, whose album ‘The Number of the Beast’ defines the entire genre, Van Halen, Kiss Black Sabath and many other bands.

If you want to see more specific details such as what guitars the great players have played on or to grasp more general stuff like historical development of Rock and Roll go to http://www.rockhall.com/.

1st T's Corr. of Article 1:The Gateway to Ancient Egypt by N.Maksimovic

Nemanja, your article has a lot of good points, but it can be polished in the way indicated in italicised red letters below. The sections in bold refer to spelling, vocabulary or grammar errors.

If you like stories, ancient myths and films like Indiana Jones, this site is the right place for you. Than on the other hand, if you want to impress some hot history teacher by telling him or her some /repetition/ intersting story from Egypt mythology than /repetition/I would give you the same advise: Stop looking through some old dusty books and get on the www.gatewaytoancientegypt.co.uk!

In my opinion the best fact is that this way you can both learn and find some interesting stuff in your spare time. /Indicate that you are introducing an example/ Religion has always played an important role in the lives of the Egyptians. During "Pharaonic" times a large number of Gods and Goddesses were worshipped. These took many different forms. /Finish this paragraph/

This and much more you can see on this site, so don’t get bored, get on the net! /Develop your paragraph a little bit more./

1st T's Corr. of Article 1: I Love This Game by A.Petrovic

Aleksandar, your composition is very good, but there is still place for improvement. The sections to be improved are highlighted in bold. Also, make your introduction a little bit more interesting for the reader, e.g. by using one or two rhetorical questions.

The world’s most popular basketball museum is The Naismith Memorial Basketball Hall Of Fame museum in Springfield. This museum exict to acknowledge and honor people who have risen to the top of thier profession. It was born on February 17, 1968, on the campus of Springfield College, when a group of people headed by famous Lee Williams managed to open museum to the public.

In this museum you can see whole history of the basketball. In my opinion, the most interesting story here is about one of the best NBA season ever 1983-84. In that text you can find out things about true legends of NBA. There is a comparation between Larry Bird and Magic Johnson who played big NBA finals in that year. There is also story about our famous people in basketball.

When there is no basketball game you can watch, you should visit Naismith’s Hall Of Fame Museum and find out about things and people who changed basketball history and made basketball for one of the most popular sports.
-by Aleksandar Petrovic

1st T's Corr.of Article 1: The Number of the Beast by M.Milicevic

Milos, here are some hints for you to try and improve your article. I have highlighted the sections to be corrected in bold (these are mostly spelling, vocabulary or grammar errors). The italicised red sections need improvement in style or organisation. You could also make some kind of a reference to your title - some people have no idea what it refers to.

Do you know the famus opera Tommy by the famus Rock band Who? Or the names like Bruce Dickinson and Ozzy Ozbourne? If you aren’t go on virtual site Rock and Roll hall of fame and museum. It is interesting that this museum has every document about every Rock selebraty and his achivments during their life.

Expetialy I liked timeline in which you can see the historical developing of Rock and Roll. You can learn about famos heavy metal bands which i like /repetition/ vary much and I can recomend you to read about Metallica, Iron Maden, Van Halen, Kiss Black Sabath and many other bands.

If you want to see what guitars have the great players played on or to see /repetition/ historical developing of Rock and Roll go on www.rockhall.com.

1st T's Corr. of Article 1: How To Do Something Strange and Useful by M.Ilincic

Marko, here are some hints to help you correct your article. Bolded sections contain a spelling, vocabulary or grammar mistake, and the red italicised ones refer to style or organisation. Please develop your concluding paragraph a little further.

I have just returned from a virtual museum called the Museum of Unnatural Mistery. The most of the people thinks that visiting museums is boring but most of the people /repetition/ is wrong. This museum is very interesting because it contains many lesons of how to do something strange for example: How to make water to bend on 1 side without touching it or to make a air ballon etc.

By my opinion the most interesting thing in that museum is to learn how to make some hydrogen. Its very easy, everybody can do it using only: a glass of water, a wire and a 9V battery. Its very interesting because you devide the atoms of hydrogen(H) from the atoms of oxygen: /use a linker here/ With that reaction you get a small explosion.

To all i would recommend to learns how to grow your own crystal. Its easy, the equipment is cheap and you can get rich too.

I Love This Game

The world’s most popular basketball museum is The Naismith Memorial Basketball Hall Of Fame museum in Springfield. This museum exict to acknowledge and honor people who have risen to the top of thier profession. It was born on February 17, 1968, on the campus of Springfield College when a group of people headed by famous Lee Williams managed to open museum to the public.

In this museum you can see whole history of the basketball. In my opinion the most interesting story here is about one of the best NBA season ever 1983-84. In that text you can find out things about true legends of NBA. There is a comparation between Larry Bird and Magic Johnson who played big NBA finals in that year. There is also story about our famous people in basketball.

When there is no basketball game you can watch, you should visit Naismith’s Hall Of Fame Museum and find out about things and people who changed basketball history and made basketball for one of the most popular sports.
by Aleksandar Petrovic

How to do something strange and useful?

I have just returned from a virtual museum called the Museum of Unnatural Mistery.The most of the people thinks that visiting museums is boring but most of the people is wrong.This museum is very interesting because it contains many lesons of how to do something strange for example:How to make water to bend on 1 side without touching it or to make a air ballon etc.

By my opinion the most interesting thing in that museum is to learn how to make some hydrogen.Its very easy,everybody can do it using only:a glass of water,a wire and a 9v battery.Its very interesting because you devide the atoms of hydrogen(H) from the atoms of oxygen:With that reaction you get a small explosion.

To all i would recommend to learns how to grow your own crystal.Its easy,the equipment is cheap and you can get rich too.

By Marko Ilincic

THE TRUTH IS OUT THERE ?

The truth is really out there - in Museum Of Unnatural Mystery. This museum is about unnatural things like UFO-s, Mummies, Ghosts, Bermuda Triangle, Yeti... There are lots of exibition halls.
There is very interesting exibition about Leonardo da Vinci. Scientists suppose that Da Vinci was the leader of secret organisation called „The Prior of Sion“ whose members were Issac Newton, and Victor Hugo. They also think that Mona Lisa is self-portrait. In my opinion this theme is very interesting.
Another interesting exibit is dedicated to Roswell in New Mexico. This is the place where UFO crashed in 1947. Although there were many witnesses military declared that UFO was actually a weather ballon.
There is also part of museum named Virtual cyclorama. There you can see 3D reconstructions of Stonehedge and Temple of Zeus. If you visit museum shop you can find many interesting souvenirs, but they are not so cheap.
The only thing I didn’t like were some exbits about dinosaurs, space or archeology. They really don’t fit here. If you have any free time go and visit it – you won’t regret. It is better to think about aliens than to study for school. Isn’t it?

ASSIGNMENT 3/1: MUSEUM ARTICLE

Dear Lingva Achiever,

You have agreed to write an article about a museum for your school magazine. You have just returned from a (virtual) visit to a museum in our country or abroad. Describe the chosen museum, say what you like or don't like about it, and why it could be interesting to your readers. Use from 120 to 180 words.

Here are some useful links:

SERBIA AND MONTENEGRO

National Museum in Belgrade
Nikola Tesla Museum
Museum of Contemporary Art Belgrade

WORLD

Nasa's Observatorium
The Exploratorium in San Francisco
Franklin Museum

or choose from this amazing site with
300 virtual museums: